Isaiah Swann
Ms. Thompson
AP Lang, Block 1, Skinny B
6 May 2015
DAP for “The Ethnocentrism of and Discrimination Against Islam and Christianity"
This synthesis essay was written with the end goal of providing coherent and cogent evidence in support of the argument that Islam is more vulnerable to persecution and is, in fact, also persecuted against most often within the United States.
On one hand, my response had many strengths. For one, I offered many points that were well thoughtout and qualified. Moreover, I provided incessant commentary, support, and explanation for each qualification that I provided. On the other hand, however, there were many opportunities for improvement. I lacked a strong and effectual conclusion, as well as specific examples that referred back to the prompt. These negative items, in combination, contributed to an overall negative effect on my timed response and made the paper less than stellar.
Ms. Thompson
AP Lang, Block 1, Skinny B
6 May 2015
DAP for “The Ethnocentrism of and Discrimination Against Islam and Christianity"
This synthesis essay was written with the end goal of providing coherent and cogent evidence in support of the argument that Islam is more vulnerable to persecution and is, in fact, also persecuted against most often within the United States.
On one hand, my response had many strengths. For one, I offered many points that were well thoughtout and qualified. Moreover, I provided incessant commentary, support, and explanation for each qualification that I provided. On the other hand, however, there were many opportunities for improvement. I lacked a strong and effectual conclusion, as well as specific examples that referred back to the prompt. These negative items, in combination, contributed to an overall negative effect on my timed response and made the paper less than stellar.